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miztrebor's review
4.0
The Making of Marea is a good short story that hints at so much more. I was happy to see that this was part of what will be a series, because there’s much more to this story than the reader gets in this one.
Overall I liked this one. I really liked Marea’s character. I can tell she’s complex and not to be taken lightly. I wasn’t as keen on Delano, but he wasn’t all bad. I feel that there was some story missing from this one. As I said, it’s part of the series, but I think there’s not enough revealed for this one to fully pull me in. The reader’s thrown into the scene blindly, while it unfolds, but I didn’t think it unfolded fully enough in a few areas. That’ll probably be fixed in later installments.
Another small issue I had while reading was the point of view. It’s third person, but the issue was that it jumped from being inside Marea’s head to Delano’s too often for such a short story. There was at least one time when this change occurred in mid-paragraph. It’s only slightly jarring, but worth mentioning. There was also a small section when Marea’s name changed to “Maria.” Small hiccup, but something another proofread could clear up.
But in the end, it’s a good story. I liked the twist and how that’ll lead to something bigger. The mild-erotic scene that is incorporated into the story was a nice touch as well. It added to the story without taking center-stage. I’ll have to come back for more of this Vampire Historia series when more comes out.
Overall I liked this one. I really liked Marea’s character. I can tell she’s complex and not to be taken lightly. I wasn’t as keen on Delano, but he wasn’t all bad. I feel that there was some story missing from this one. As I said, it’s part of the series, but I think there’s not enough revealed for this one to fully pull me in. The reader’s thrown into the scene blindly, while it unfolds, but I didn’t think it unfolded fully enough in a few areas. That’ll probably be fixed in later installments.
Another small issue I had while reading was the point of view. It’s third person, but the issue was that it jumped from being inside Marea’s head to Delano’s too often for such a short story. There was at least one time when this change occurred in mid-paragraph. It’s only slightly jarring, but worth mentioning. There was also a small section when Marea’s name changed to “Maria.” Small hiccup, but something another proofread could clear up.
But in the end, it’s a good story. I liked the twist and how that’ll lead to something bigger. The mild-erotic scene that is incorporated into the story was a nice touch as well. It added to the story without taking center-stage. I’ll have to come back for more of this Vampire Historia series when more comes out.
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