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stevia333k's review
1.0
this story's author needed more time to write.
not the worst thing I have ever read in terms of fleshing out but it was not really anything good to right home about. either the author had some cardboard dolls and wrote out what was on a playful session's whim or the author took the challenge, totally forgot about it (or otherwise, maybe the evil day job?) and remembered like at the last minute and had to publish whatever they had.
so yeah it seemed like it needed more time to cultivate because this wasn't really that developed. tragic in terms of what could have been written but it has so shallow & brief that I can't really complain about it much.
good luck to the author in future writing endeavors, you need more time to flesh things out and edit.
not the worst thing I have ever read in terms of fleshing out but it was not really anything good to right home about. either the author had some cardboard dolls and wrote out what was on a playful session's whim or the author took the challenge, totally forgot about it (or otherwise, maybe the evil day job?) and remembered like at the last minute and had to publish whatever they had.
so yeah it seemed like it needed more time to cultivate because this wasn't really that developed. tragic in terms of what could have been written but it has so shallow & brief that I can't really complain about it much.
good luck to the author in future writing endeavors, you need more time to flesh things out and edit.
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